@twilitezone911 Said
this story was boring and too long. it might interesting to watch it on ' tales of dark side '. i think frankly the story was weak, it would more interest she found was in a coffin than a trap in hotel room forever. the story doesn't explain how she died or why she is force to haunt the room. is she died in hotel room, how did she died, why she has to stay there. in the first minutes, i like the story, but after that i couldn't care about this character.
pat- you want to write poetry is fine. but this story was more for children than adult. pat- this story is not good example use if you want write a scary story. ' tell tale heart ' by eagar allen poe. this story is one of the best scary story of ever told. you listen to this story on books on tape.
They have better stories than the one I posted. Thank you for giving me Tell Tale Heart as a good reference point. That is a great horror story. I think for some of these stories that are written, they don't put these short stories in full detail. They like the fans to use their imaginations that is one thing that causes them to be so successful. I personally enjoy their stories. I get to let my imagination run wild while listening to them. If I'm tired I can use the bad ones to put me to sleep.
I feel like poetry was just a starting point for me. Once I start back up and perfect my skills in poetry I want to jump straight into story telling. I want to make something so dark and terrifying for them to post and have someone like Otis Jiry narrate it.