Please read this...I want opinions..

Today is a really beautiful day. Everything is frozen and painted pink by the rising sun. When I set off to pick my way down the icy hillside, everything was bathed in a soft blue glow, the frost glittering and winking in the nondescript light cast from the very fibre of a time that was neither night nor day, when neither moon nor sun was present.


When my eyes behold such splendour, poetry forms in my head, collecting in threads which weave together before flowing like silk from my pen.
The sky is a startling azure. The blurred reflections of monstrous pine trees streak along the silvery, frozen river as it snakes through the harsh, barren countryside. A wall of fog looms ahead of me, seemingly solid, until I plunge into it. The winding road stretches about a hundred metres ahead of me, then vanishes. Apart from that, I am surrounded, almost smothered, in white. How very daunting.

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Wow! I could never write something like that. Great job.

That is Brilliant and very descriptive. Well Done

You certainly have a way with words !

I was almost there !

It's a really great piece... but if I may suggest, maybe you can intrigue the reader by deleting the first sentence. I'm not sure - but to me, the : "Today is really a beautiful day" somehow should be the conclusion, rather than the introduction.

"Picking my way down the icy hillside, everything was bathed in a soft blue glow, the frost glittering and winking in the nondescript light cast from the very fibre of a time that was neither night nor day, when neither moon nor sun was present.

When my eyes behold such splendour, poetry forms in my head, collecting in threads which weave together before flowing like silk from my pen.

The sky is a startling azure. The blurred reflections of monstrous pine trees streak along the silvery, frozen river as it snakes through the harsh, barren countryside. A wall of fog looms ahead of me, seemingly solid, until I plunge into it. The winding road stretches about a hundred metres ahead of me, then vanishes. Apart from that, I am surrounded, almost smothered, in white. Everything is frozen and painted pink by the rising sun.

So very daunting, yet so very beautiful."

That's just my opinion... but a very descriptive, beautiful piece, nonetheless.

It's great! I love how you play with the adjectives. It gives you a perfect picture of how you see things. ^_^

I got goosebumps from reading this. You certainly have a talent for writing.

Didders
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Thanks..I'm trying to get some stuff published...we shall see.

i think it's really quite good. i know this is a totally phillistine thing to say but it reminded me of japanese horror games such as silent hill.

I think that that was really good. Theres some astounding imagery there, and I like the way you finish. Without sounding intrusive, it seems that sometimes you use perhaps too many latinate adjectives. Most of it worked perfectly, but in one or two places they sounded a bit forced, and sometimes you might find that its better to just go with the flow. Anyway thats just my opinion, but I think that it was really great.

That was good! I like your descriptions, as well as the way you weaved it all together. See, there are 2 kinds of writers: the ones who just tell the story, and those who weave it like a grand, masterful work of art. You're the latter. Good job!

i dont mean to be down but i agree...i love reading n such i write a lot myself...its mesmorizing...yet i felt sum was forced also ....dont worry tho...i think youll be good in the long run