@Octavarium Said
Alright, let me say at the start that I think it's this is a good peice, I like it. There's an excellent idea and questioning and a good follow through of that thought. And good play of words that add to the journying quest of thought.
The only comment of constructive analysis I have is there were a few points where flow was locked up a bit and I had to stop on in order to understand exactly what was meant or being said. Lines 6 and 10 got me a little tossed for a moment. I see what your saying, what you mean, it just took a little more studying in context with the surrounding lines to understand.
Overall a strong peice of work though. Very good.
I can agree with that,some tweeking would be helpful. This is an unusual style.