What do you guys think of my Simpsons fanfic?

Is this guy for real?

Well, maybe I'm avoiding this film because I don't want to contribute to its success, and because I don't want to immerse myself in the sheer atrocity of it?

You will never know.

Brilliant, aint it?

I call you a misogynist when you say misogynistic things.




Bull s***.

I call BobF out on his stupid s*** on a regular basis, and have been doing it for years.

I do like BobF, but too often his views fall between poorly informed and willfully ignorant.

And...again...I call him out all the time.

What he really wants to know is how come you let bob see under that blue dress and not him? Personally i think its cause you're a misogynist who has a thing for aussies.

I am a bit of an Aussiogynist!

(I just invented that word... )

...oh and BobF doesn't not get to see under the blue dress

...no one does...except DT and Floydie...

So you don't trust australians? Is it cause their beer is gross? Or because they don't sell Johnny Walker down there?


I think i am a misogynist. I have serious trust issues when it cones to women nowadays, I even tried to hate them for a while. That lasted all of like a day. :/

Don't be a brown nose Chaski. It ain't no fun if the homies cant have none.

I like this dinosaur idea more than other story.

with the 10 kid's story, I think if you stay with your vies of women and men, and how they treat in negative ways, how they express them as a man and woman.

you probably stories that really positive not narrow thing that you are too young to have at your age.

you tender focus negative things that members get mad at you. you do have talent to write. but stay the positive things on women.

women and men would like read things, you wrote. in the future, you are going discuss a movie like reboot of " the ghostbusters ". you see it first. you are control over the thread, you know what are talking about.

I like the idea, you think more for a child than a adult with plot like the little girl.

it remind of " inside out " that focus what a child understand what her emotions are, she understand in her own body.

your dinosaur story should more positive with the female dinosaur, and both male and female dinosaur should be equal.

be careful, show negativity, where the male white dinosaur's attitude on anything. it doesn't have be anything like man vs. -----.

there a famous American classic called " the music man ".

a stranger come in Midwest small town, and he convince the whole town that a marching band that really don't need.

the stranger arch-villain, " marian the librarian " , who think he is con man. of course, the man named " Harold hill ".

Harold hill is con man, he is only interested conned everyone in the town, to buy musical instructments and band uniforms.

Harold broke the con's no. one rule don't to care for victims.

harold fall in love with marian the librarian, and harold believe in his own con game to swindle these town people.

this movie is one of my favorite movie.

anyway, you think kind of way that your dinosaur story more " pg " than " r " story. I mean positive story and than hang up views are not necessary in a story.

you aim for something is positive that teach a lesson that some moral reasons behind it.

you really stay as far away from views of how men feel about women.

you got a lot of imagination above, I see, you have. stay from negative views that brother you to that you are express on the forum. you can be a good writer, if you think positive!

i'm not. Being a misogynist around the women in my family can lead to poor health and a short life.

Well, technically, that would be "misaustralist" - the term you used more accurately translates to "Aussie woman-ist" or something like that.

Yes, I believe you are right.

I should have consulted my reference book of greek and latin prefixes and suffixes before that post...not sure where it is though...most likely in storage in Florida....so I should have just used the internet..

Not gonna lie, it felt like I was reading a screenplay rather than a story. If that's what you're going for, or if you don't care as a writer, than fine, whatever. Just know that this style choice can turn some readers off almost immediately, largely because it makes it almost impossible to get sucked into a story written this way without actors playing it out in front of you. It should also be noted that you don't want to open up a story with an information dump consisting of information that most Simpsons fans should already know. You're not creating a new world from nothing, you're drawing from per-existing material. You don't need to reiterate 'world building' information like the location of Springfield or the Simpsons address to an audience that should already be familiar with it. In that light, including 'worthless' information, like the exact date, does nothing but clutter up an opening narrative with information the reader, largely, will not care about. Unless there's a story reason to include something as pointlessly innocuous as a date, don't do it.

Now, I'd like to preface this next bit with the disclaimer that I have seen very little of the Simpsons. As such, I have very little reference on what could be considered Lisa's, Bart's and Homer's original characters. Hell, most of the things I know about the Simpsons in general is just based on cultural osmosis. Be that as it may, one of the most fundamental tenets of fan fiction is that you do not alter characters unless absolutely necessary to your story. I did not believe your interpretation of Lisa, chiefly because I didn't think you got the essence of what makes Lisa compelling. I could overlook that Lisa took up a feminist cause, that part wasn't the issue. It's the feel of the character in their dialogue and choices that rings hollow. For instance, Lisa has a tendency for using large words correctly, unless she's forced to dumb things down. Even when angry, she had a propensity towards large, complex words that encapsulated her feelings rather than resorting to words like 'f***ing retard'. Yes, we can normally explain it away as an angry outburst, but Lisa didn't seem to operate like that as a character. The same goes for Bart and Homer, their dynamic appears to be largely a combination of dismissal and light hostility. I could not believe that Homer and Bart would sit down and watch a show together, not after Bart and Homer get angry at each other over the show. I also could not believe that Homer wouldn't tell Bart to 'be quiet, I'm trying to watch TV' after Bart started asking questions. It's the little things that will convince your audience that you know what you're doing and that you understand the characters they love. If you can't even get that far, well...

Next, I'd like to talk about 'morality stories'. These are the types of stories clearly written with an agenda other than to provide an interesting and engaging story. Now, I'm not going to say that these stories don't have the right to exist, but you're writing fan fiction. By virtue of that, one of the chief concerns of a person looking for fan fiction is that they want something interesting. Either an interesting interpretation of a character or interesting events around a character or characters they love. Either a good plot or good characters, at the very least. Now, I can't look into the future and see where you're original premise is going with this story, but everything from the title to the description screams 'morality story' like it's screaming cold, bloody murder. Your title 'Lisa vs. Ms. Male characters' indicates an antagonistic stance on a social issue, and whether people are for it, against it, don't know, or don't care, very few like to be beaten over the head with the moral point. For most, it becomes tiring and annoying VERY quickly. Your description indicates a lack of direction IN ADDITION to more moral brow beating. You straight up admit that you haven't even started part 2 yet, implying, at the very least, that you're not really sure on where your going with the story, that it's not even worth the readers time to slog through the moral brow beating because you, seemingly, have no idea what you're doing from a narrative perspective.