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New Song...
November 22, 2006 @ 09:26:47 pm
Well yeah i have been writing a new song and i would like some feedback for what i have written please
Its entitled 'I Don't Love You'

Thats what is said
Looking in your eyes
Wanting you to go
Because of all the lies

Now i want you gone
Stay away frome me
You took my heart
and tore..it...out..of...me




Well thats it so far
comments appreciated as long as they are constructive

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disturbed247

New Post! November 22, 2006 @ 09:27:57 pm
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thats really good
got any sort of tune you got in mind for it?


treebee

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New Post! November 22, 2006 @ 09:28:11 pm
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Well Dave, i dont usually comment on this sort of thing, but it reads well and is pretty sad


dark_lotus

New Post! November 22, 2006 @ 09:34:07 pm
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Yes its supposed to be sad
it was written about a girl that destroyed me emotionally
hehe but whta can you do, its why i am such a bitter twisted wreck.

And now i vent all my wonderful twisted thoughts and emotions through my words and my songs and my poems


treebee

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New Post! November 22, 2006 @ 09:34:40 pm
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@dark_lotus Said
Yes its supposed to be sad
it was written about a girl that destroyed me emotionally
hehe but whta can you do, its why i am such a bitter twisted wreck.

And now i vent all my wonderful twisted thoughts and emotions through my words and my songs and my poems


well at least that is constructive


disturbed247

New Post! November 22, 2006 @ 09:36:28 pm
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lol
yeah why not
its good


dark_lotus

New Post! November 22, 2006 @ 09:36:34 pm
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Yeah its better than shredding my arms with a knife isn't it
and sometimes i write some interesting things that people like and enjoy


treebee

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New Post! November 22, 2006 @ 09:37:38 pm
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@dark_lotus Said
Yeah its better than shredding my arms with a knife isn't it
and sometimes i write some interesting things that people like and enjoy


absolutely, its an outlet and i must admit your lyrics are good


dark_lotus

New Post! November 22, 2006 @ 09:40:56 pm
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@treebee Said
absolutely, its an outlet and i must admit your lyrics are good


Ha my lyrics are rubbish my words are rubbish. all they do is serve as a way for me to get rid of feelings without killing someone, destorying something or hurting someone.


treebee

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New Post! November 22, 2006 @ 09:42:47 pm
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@dark_lotus Said
Ha my lyrics are rubbish my words are rubbish. all they do is serve as a way for me to get rid of feelings without killing someone, destorying something or hurting someone.


come on babe dont be down on yourself


dark_lotus

New Post! November 23, 2006 @ 10:54:09 am
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@treebee Said
come on babe dont be down on yourself


i am always down on myself, could be something to do with ythe fact that i hate me

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