a chance "please read and comment"

if ever i had gotten
a life full of chance
a time of no worry
a smile at every glance
an undertermined time
that was just full of pleasure
an aboundance of happiness
no one could ever measure
to walk in the presance
of a continuing calming breeze
surrounded by the pleasnt tunes
of the birds in the greenest trees
what would life be known
with no ugliness in the world
to feel no pains or hurt
nor a heartbreak from a girl
if sorrow was unheard of
and a tear never fell from a eye
that the darkened cloulds above
never formed in the sky
that a thought on your mind
never tilted toward a bad time
that a shadow did not darken
but instead threw off shine
if decception was not a greedy exstiance
and lack of care was never heard of
if every heart reached for another
cause all it looked for was love
that a smile told its wonders
and brought a truthfullness to a face
that everything was alright
wouldnt you want to live in this place?

Pretty good.

that is so beautiful indeed. , i luv the way you describe it . lovely

Very nice. Well-expressed.

"WIMMING!" (popeye)

very good like always

very good poetry. i actually almost cried!! *laugh*

thks so much and hop i didnt really make u lol

Awesome dude!

Very well done. You display good progression of thought, each sentence building upon that last forming an easily imagined picture at the end.
The theme is well thought out and challanges the reader to question and ponder as well.
Nicely done.

time of no worry
a smile at every glance
an undertermined time
that was just full of pleasure
an aboundance of happiness..

if we dont face troubles in life, and be always happy
l think we cant appreciate the worth happiness, time and good friends..

and this poem reflects the missing gor that kind of life,
its nice.

idk, if we never knew the dark side of life wouldnt we never exxpect to not know the feeling we would always have