Parents! If this happened to your child, what would you say to him/her?

First of all, the Mom made an insensitive statement to the beat up boy. The daughter must've learned her compassion from her Father. How did the Mom know that the boy didn't get the wounds fighting off the burglar while she disarmed him?

Secondly, Police "arriving within minutes" is a fantasy.

J.R.

I think the parent would simply be relieved their daughter is all right, and not too worried about how she was saved at the moment.

It's your story, you shouldn't rely on other people to fill in the blanks for you or give you validation on what is right for the situation or not.

The main aspect is is that whatever scene you write, it has the move the plot along. That should be your main objective. So it maybe better to think ahead of what you want to happen in the story and then think "how does this scene impact my future scene." If this scene has no impact on any future scene, then it's safe to say that it's just filler and can be cut.

There is no right and wrong answer. The parents can say even all the wrong things... and it would be OKAY if is necessary for your plot to move. They can say the right things too... but it has to impact the plot and your MC as to why the scene is necessary. why is the scene necessary is your question. If in this scene, the parents over-react and forbid the girl to have any contact with the boy that got beaten up even if he didn't do anything wrong... then that is impactful, because if you want the girl and that boy falling for each other, the parents are going to be problems of how they can be with each other.

--- but to answer your question.

What would a parent say. Well since there is a stalker involved. How to be responsible, how to be safe, how to report things that she perceives as odd, how to keep an eye for herself both when she alone and when she is with someone else.

I'd go over safety and I'd probably set precautions that I want you to call home every time you are going to be late or going to friend house and so on and so forth.

As far as the other guy, I'd thank him and glad that she is okay. Since the attack happen at the girls house, I'd assume that the girls parents will talk to the guy parents. Make sure the boy is okay since he did get beat up.

If the girl and guy are just friends and they say that, as a parent I'd probably ask if she like him and if she does, take it slow. Same as any other situation.

Yeah that's why I was debating whether or not I would have the mom say that...

And yes, that's totally fantasy but I'm planning to add a unicorn to the story later so it's not going to be realistic at all anyways.

The mom doesn't know the whole story yet, so she's assuming the boy protected the girl. But I'm still debating whether or not to keep that quote in there.

thanks for the ideas!

For now, I'm going to make it so that after the police arrive, the girl's parents come home, have a "WTF" moment, and then call the boy's parents.

I had a daughter that was 110 % tomboy no doubt, I was thinking of her at around 14 or 15 years of age .