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unfinished, screenplay short. (about schizophrenia)

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radicolpotato On September 14, 2018




magna,
#1New Post! Nov 01, 2009 @ 23:51:22
it is not finished (obviously)

pleas tell me what you think.



scene 1

EXT.at park under a tree, day

John is sitting under a tree with his head up and eyes closed

voices

jump up and down and all around. jump up and down and all around. jump John! jump!

EXT.street, day. beginning credits

john walks down the street

scene 2

EXT. to int. house, day

John unlocks and opens the door and takes his keys on a counter by the door.

John walks further into the house and shuts the door

INT. bathroom, day

John is on the toilet. John stands up while pulling his pants up, and zips and buttons his pants.

John opens up the medisen cabinet, grabs a bottle of pills, closes the cabinet, opens the bottle, takes a pill into his hand and puts it into his mouth. sets down the bottle, turns on the bathroom sink, fills his hands up with water and takes a drink from his hands, and splashes some water on his face and rubs his face with his hands. than he grabs the hand towel and drys his face with it.

scene 3

INT. kitchen, day

John sits down at the kitchen table, where their is a note book open to a blank page. he stairs at the page as words appear:

Get there john

you can dooooo better as your thoughts go onnnnn....

get to the place where they can't fined youuuuuuu.....!???!...

get to the place. and i will show yoouuuuuuuuuuuuu......

death to john!!!!!!!!!

deeeeaaathe toooooo johnnnnnn....!

deth tooooo joooooohhhhnnnnn!!!!...


john

no!!!!

john grabs the notebook and throws it a cross the room, grabs his head.

cut to:

john quickly opens a drawer and rapidly goes thru its content. he comes to a pill bottle . he picks it up, shakes it than opens it only to fined nothing.

JOHN

damn it!

john throws the empty bottle on the floor

cut to:

john is paesing back and forth in his kitchen on the phone.

JOHN

come on, come on!

someone answers the phone. john stops paesing.

JOHN

hi, i was wondering if you have a prescription there for john harson.

short pause.

JOHN

ok, I'll wait.

longer pause.

john rubs his face. something catches his eye outside of the front room window. he goes towards the window and looks out of it.he seas a short demising creature running around on his front lawn in a circle. the creature runs out of sight. john moves his head around trying to fined the creature. the creature slowly emerges from the floor of the porch and stairs at john with a twisted grin on its face.

JOHN

go away Grogen.

he points his finger at the creature.

the creature jumps threw the window, tackling john to the ground.

voice on the phone

sorry, we don't have a prescription for a john harson.

john is on his back on the floor with the demon sitting on johns belly. the creature smiles at john, waves and disappears.

john gets on his feet.

JOHN

sorry, what was that.

VOICE ON THE PHONE

we don't have a prescription hear for you. sorry.

JOHN

kay.

scene 4

john pushes a button to hang up the phone, than pushes the button agen and dials a number in, and puts the phone up to his ear.

JOHN

(quickly)

Steve, Steve, Steve.

Steve

john, whats up man?

JOHN

(quickly)

i godda get it, i godda get it, godda get it man.

john puts fingers thrue his hair and grabs his head.

STEVE

woh man, what is it?

JOHN


i need it! there all gone!!!

STEVE

okay, you know what man. Im coming over kay?

JOHN

yeah yeah.

STEVE

kay, im on my way.

john hangs up the phone. he stairs at the floor.

JOHN

okay... okay... okay... godda get it godda get it.

he looks up to the sealing.

JOHN

yep, yep, yep.

scene 5

john walks to the door and stands in front of it and stairs strait ahead.

john's mind takes over his senses. he sees at a park he sees a little girl with pigtails swinging on a swing. the girl stops swinging, slowly turns her head facing john and her pigtails pop off her head and float to the sky. she quickly takes her head off and throws it at john.

john comes back to reality as there is a knock on the door.

he cracks the door open a bit and peeks out side to see Steve. john then opens the door to let Steve in.



Electric_Banana On February 05, 2024




, New Zealand
#2New Post! Nov 02, 2009 @ 01:42:11
You should demonstrate where John finally says 'screw it' and goes on a bender drinking his subconscience stupid and belching out loudly at existence.
loveis On January 15, 2010
brat-inella


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In the mirror,
#3New Post! Nov 02, 2009 @ 02:51:56
That is good; though I don't have any real knowlege of schizophrenia, it sounds really scary.
How ppl deal with it, is beyond me..very sad.
radicolpotato On September 14, 2018




magna,
#4New Post! Nov 02, 2009 @ 03:06:15
@Electric_Banana Said

You should demonstrate where John finally says 'screw it' and goes on a bender drinking his subconscience stupid and belching out loudly at existence.



ummm.... no
radicolpotato On September 14, 2018




magna,
#5New Post! Nov 02, 2009 @ 03:10:07
@loveis Said

That is good; though I don't have any real knowlege of schizophrenia, it sounds really scary.
How ppl deal with it, is beyond me..very sad.



ya, i have schizoaffective and have been aquatinted with other schizophrenics and schizoaffectives
Electric_Banana On February 05, 2024




, New Zealand
#6New Post! Nov 02, 2009 @ 03:18:52
@radicolpotato Said

ya, i have schizoaffective and have been aquatinted with other schizophrenics and schizoaffectives


I'm a proffesional schizophrenic. Lol.

Check out my journal, you might find it interesting. =)
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