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cm91 On March 12, 2014




base of the mountains,
#1New Post! Jul 10, 2008 @ 00:03:12
I trusted them with My life and health
for instilling in them My health it was taken away
Now I live in pain and discomfort each and every day
Brain Surgeons speak with confidence and optimism
They mention no mistakes
And when a patient leave in worse shape than they came
They act as if they never knew You name!
YOu will get no appology, not even an understanding smile
Not as long as the money they made off You is in a great big pile
No admission of fault, not even one of referal to someone who can help
no..... You are the "case" of this so called proffesional, actually just a whelp
I have loved ones, Friends and Family
But there is nothing they can do, and I try not to complain
As no one likes to hear about a persons injured brain
One who hand seem to always shake now...
And seems to always frown

especially not a brain surgeon who thinks he makes no mistakes......
loveis On January 15, 2010
brat-inella


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In the mirror,
#2New Post! Jul 10, 2008 @ 00:47:37
That's sad. ...I'm at an utter loss for words.
cm91 On March 12, 2014




base of the mountains,
#3New Post! Jul 10, 2008 @ 17:29:24
Well, I have lots of words. My thoughts and feelings clash with My Religious beliefs at times too. Sometimes I think angry, mean things about it, which is bad. It is human nature to be vindictive, but Im not really a vindictive person, and I know its not right to be that way. So, I have to work hard to not let it eat ME up. But thats hard to do when Im hurt and have lost such health while the persons responsible carry on pain free....

What Id really like is just to be OK again. This is the first summer Ive had since the operations and the heat makes pain come on worse. Im just venting, sry,.
loveis On January 15, 2010
brat-inella


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In the mirror,
#4New Post! Jul 10, 2008 @ 17:50:55
@cm91 Said
Well, I have lots of words. My thoughts and feelings clash with My Religious beliefs at times too. Sometimes I think angry, mean things about it, which is bad. It is human nature to be vindictive, but Im not really a vindictive person, and I know its not right to be that way. So, I have to work hard to not let it eat ME up. But thats hard to do when Im hurt and have lost such health while the persons responsible carry on pain free....

What Id really like is just to be OK again. This is the first summer Ive had since the operations and the heat makes pain come on worse. Im just venting, sry,.


Don't be sorry..
It's perfectly normal for you to feel angry!
Anybody would if they were in your place!!
..never feel that you are alone...if you ever need to just vent, or 'whatever', even if I'm not online, leave me a pm..I'll always get back to you,- I promise.
Take good care of YOU!
cm91 On March 12, 2014




base of the mountains,
#5New Post! Jul 17, 2008 @ 01:17:42
moving down the highway, no smile
Today I made many many miles
The good doctor who takes Me in after the fool
even He is backing up to punt now
And Im so worried, and life can be so cruel
"Have the brain surgeon re-test it" He sugests
The same guy who put Me in this condition?
"No thanks" Says I "A NEW surgeon would be best!"
So now, with spinal taps and MRIs and CAT scans looming
back to square one..... ah geez I hope My head AGAIN they wont be over grooming! (shaved! NOOOO!)
My SHY so so SHY nature has bitten Me this time
I have hidden how ill I am from lots of people
My Father is sad now, as are My dearest Friends....Id given them no sign!
But no longer can I hide it, the pain and concern burned into My face
I feel unworthy of this world! I wish I could disappear with no trace
All I offer My peers is trouble, my loved ones worry, myself pain!
I feel like I am nothing to this world but a drain
My quiet nature.... I have told not even Beautiful K
Will she understand, or just be blown away?
There could be a bright side, a true solution, yes
But for over 7 months now, My health has "spiraled downward" at best.
New pills of one kind Im on, more of another
Like a young guy needs THIS MANY! oh brother....
All for the better it will be,
Perhaps its best this happens to Me
There is no way Id be of any count to K like this! no way!
Just a wonderful beautiful light I can wish to kiss
"Pie in the sky" they says of dreams like that
Maybe this is why Ive always lived fast and dreamed so FAT!
Im coming to the real conclusion that maybe...

I could well just be a shooting star, do You know?
smilelove On September 01, 2013
Ninja Dreamer





Somewhere, Ohio
#6New Post! Jul 17, 2008 @ 01:23:04
Aww. That's really nice poetry. I'm sorry you have to be in pain.
calonso On January 16, 2014




Orlando, Florida
#7New Post! Jul 17, 2008 @ 17:54:24
you're a very talented kid lil bro and I'm sorry you have to go throught this, but I'm proud of your strength and your poetrys getting better too
cm91 On March 12, 2014




base of the mountains,
#9New Post! Jul 18, 2008 @ 02:13:00
Thank You Sister C and smile and dayslikethese. Its a high compliment from Calonso if She say its goodwritting.

Well, I put into what I write as much truth and myself as I can, without just writting out what I think blunty. And it does feel good to get those feelings and thoughts out, and Your feedback actually does Me more good than You all will know. Thanks. Im such a hermit about this ... well everything actually but especially these health issues, so coming here to express whats happend to Me and what I feel is good for Me. I get ashamed to be so broken down healthwise. What a weak person to be so sick as Me. A young guy of My size and all.... to be so "frail" now. A year ago I could have fought a bear! Now.... it hurts BAD just to hop off the ground. LOL! BTW, I do have sense enough to know that IT COULD BE WORSE and YES, I know that there are many who suffer far more than I, and YES I am thankful for what health I do have! Its just that here, is where I express My sadness for how I feel inside about it, ok?

Thanks for understanding and if You dont.... Ill hush.
jasonfontaine On September 03, 2008




Houston, Texas
#10New Post! Jul 20, 2008 @ 23:10:21
Great work.
Just google Jason Fontaine. I have poetic artwork here and there.
Noting quite to compare...

But, yours was good!
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