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It's lame, and I'm no writer, but I wrote a poem for my wife's birthday. She asked me too, because I used to write her little stupid poems when we were dating, which no I realize were rather lame and childish. I haven't written her one in almost 8 years, and this one may turn out to be a disaster. Let me know if it's worth giving to her or if I should try again.
To my wife, my Angel.
You took a chance, when no one tried,
You had hope, when all his died.
He wasn't much, a wreck I guess.
A crippled junkie, a total mess.
I don't know what you saw in him,
That wheelchair, and a bottle of Jim,
The fight was gone, his fate was sure,
The loss of will has no cure.
He had given up on all he tried,
He lost his legs, and then he died.
Oh sure, he breathed, and blood still pumped;
But his soul was dead, hell had him trumped.
Then you walked in, and looked at him,
Hell, I still remember that starburst grin...
You said "Hi" and talked for a while,
But I never heard a word...just watched that smile.
You left that day, and smiled goodbye...
I remeber so clearly I wanted to cry.
I asked you if I'd see you again,
And you smiled at me, and quipped, "say when"
I did see you again, more and more each day...
And each time I did my sorrows drifted further away.
Two years later you messed up your life...
You actually agreed to become my wife!
Two kids we've had, and nine precious years
Filled with laughter, love and tears.
A life was reborn, it was my rebirth,
When the man upstairs placed you on this earth.
We've been through heartaches, pain and some loss..
We've had to carry our share of the cross
And it's been uphill a lot of the way
And without you here, I'd still be astray.
You deserve better than I'll ever be,
But you'll never hear that piece of knowledge from me...
Although I'll never be the perfect man, it's true,
I'll spend the rest of my life trying to be that for you.
You are my life, my heartbeat, my soul...
And I thank God for that telephone pole...
Sure if it wasn't that car wreck I'd have a different life,
But I'd rather lose my legs than not have you as my wife.
Sometimes when it seems God is taking it all,
I can't play the game because God took my ball,
I think back to the day you made me your man,
I realize the secret to life's little plan;
I seemed to get trapped, it didn't seem fair,
I knew that forever I'd be stuck in this chair,
But the truth is that the very thing that seemed to trap me,
Was the only thing that could have happened to truly make me free.
I can't take a walk, I can't run a mile,
But I'll always be able to sit here and see you smile.
You are my Angel, My lover, my Dear
And nothing can change that, not ever, not here.
I'll live in your presence, I'll bask in your love,
And when the battle call sounds from heaven above,
I'll die in your arms, My last vision your smile,
And I'll be waiting when you get there, to walk with you for a while.
I love you, Angel, and some day when all this is over we'll take that final walk to the gate, and this time I'll be able to carry you over the threshold...I promise.
Now I know I probably demolished every rule and/or guideline for poetry, and the greta writers in history are probably rolling with laughter in their graves, but I hope it gets the point across. comments on whether or not this is worth giving her are much appreciated.
Current Music: Morbid Angel - Covenant
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MlissaBeth
Monk
33674 points | I think it's wonderful. Very touching and meaningful! Yes you should give it to her!  |
momof2
Minister
13124 points | Thats so sweet  I would be in tears and overwhelmed in a good way of course to get something like that |
Saegespaene
Ogler
20250 points | | You've grown a lot in those eight years. Yes, give it to her. It's worthy of much praise (...just correct that one mis-spelled 'remember' and this is perfect!). It should bring a tear to her eye, and a smile to her heart. |
Vizzy
Ogler
21122 points | You better give it to her! Anything you write about your love for her is worth giving to your wife. ANYTHING. And hey man, why has it been 8 years?!?! Once a month at least!  |
loveis
TFS Monkey
40560 points | One of the BEST EVER that I've read, EVER!!
You freakin ROCK dude ..
She will cherish that more than diamonds! (I know I would).
..would love to hear more in your spare time if you care to, there is a poetry section here at tfs
Thanks so much for sharing that |
warlock0622
Meister
1202 points | | Thanks so much, guys, I will give it to her. I really appreciate the feedback. You all are awesome. |
DiscordTiger
Monk
31138 points | | I just found this, and I thought that it was very moving, and well written. Who cares if you broke the rules, it was very moving, and reminiscent of something in my life. Good job in writing it, and thanks for sharing it with us. Did you give it your wife yet? |
lilbear
Ogler
29268 points | This actually brought tears to my eyes,it is beautiful and any wife would love to have this poem given to her on her day......
Not many men like you around, as you are proud to have her as a wife, she should be very proud to have you as a husband......... |
warlock0622
Meister
1202 points | Yes I gave it to her. To say the least she was...appreciative.
Thank you guys for the comments, you are all awesome. |
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