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18/M/Crewe, United Kingdom
Join Date: Nov 2005

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Age:	18
Gender:	M
Location:	Crewe North West United Kingdom
Email:	dark_lotus@hotmail.co.uk
Posts:	800
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things i can be bothered to say

New Song...
November 22, 2006 @ 09:26:47 pm

Well yeah i have been writing a new song and i would like some feedback for what i have written please
Its entitled 'I Don't Love You'

Thats what is said
Looking in your eyes
Wanting you to go
Because of all the lies

Now i want you gone
Stay away frome me
You took my heart
and tore..it...out..of...me

Well thats it so far
comments appreciated as long as they are constructive

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disturbed247 Mega Über-Meister 4719 points	November 22, 2006 @ 09:27:57 pm
	thats really good got any sort of tune you got in mind for it?

treebee UM - BONGO Über-Administrator 157362 points	November 22, 2006 @ 09:28:11 pm
	Well Dave, i dont usually comment on this sort of thing, but it reads well and is pretty sad

dark_lotus Mega Über-Meister 3300 points	November 22, 2006 @ 09:34:07 pm
	Yes its supposed to be sad it was written about a girl that destroyed me emotionally hehe but whta can you do, its why i am such a bitter twisted wreck. And now i vent all my wonderful twisted thoughts and emotions through my words and my songs and my poems

treebee UM - BONGO Über-Administrator 157362 points	November 22, 2006 @ 09:34:40 pm
	dark_lotus said: Yes its supposed to be sad it was written about a girl that destroyed me emotionally hehe but whta can you do, its why i am such a bitter twisted wreck. And now i vent all my wonderful twisted thoughts and emotions through my words and my songs and my poems well at least that is constructive

disturbed247 Mega Über-Meister 4719 points	November 22, 2006 @ 09:36:28 pm
	lol yeah why not its good

dark_lotus Mega Über-Meister 3300 points	November 22, 2006 @ 09:36:34 pm
	Yeah its better than shredding my arms with a knife isn't it and sometimes i write some interesting things that people like and enjoy

treebee UM - BONGO Über-Administrator 157362 points	November 22, 2006 @ 09:37:38 pm
	dark_lotus said: Yeah its better than shredding my arms with a knife isn't it and sometimes i write some interesting things that people like and enjoy absolutely, its an outlet and i must admit your lyrics are good

dark_lotus Mega Über-Meister 3300 points	November 22, 2006 @ 09:40:56 pm
	treebee said: absolutely, its an outlet and i must admit your lyrics are good Ha my lyrics are rubbish my words are rubbish. all they do is serve as a way for me to get rid of feelings without killing someone, destorying something or hurting someone.

treebee UM - BONGO Über-Administrator 157362 points	November 22, 2006 @ 09:42:47 pm
	dark_lotus said: Ha my lyrics are rubbish my words are rubbish. all they do is serve as a way for me to get rid of feelings without killing someone, destorying something or hurting someone. come on babe dont be down on yourself

dark_lotus Mega Über-Meister 3300 points	November 23, 2006 @ 10:54:09 am
	treebee said: come on babe dont be down on yourself i am always down on myself, could be something to do with ythe fact that i hate me

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