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December 10, 2008 @ 10:35:33 am | I made a few changes and tried to fix the tenses. I'm horrible with grammar, so I don't know how much changed there.
Let me know what you think, and if the changes ended up being a good thing or bad thing. 
Chapter 1
It was another Monday morning, and the start of another tedious week at school. My alarm had been going off for at least twenty minutes and I still had no intention of getting out of bed. I had about forty minutes to get ready for school and if I hurried, I was sure I could be ready in thirty. I had been awake since my alarm first started to go off; I just didnt want to leave my bed. I wasnt particularly tired, or even that comfortable in my small bed. However; I stayed in my bed because I didnt want to leave my dreams. I had had the same dream for weeks, about a guy who simply stood in front of me and gazed towards me. It didnt seem to bother me; I actually didnt seem to mind at all. It always felt so real, like there was an actual boy starring right at me, breathing on my face. The dream brought about a warmth that consumed every part of my body. The warmth still lingered around me when I woke up, not as strong as it was during the dream, but it was still present.
"Baby! Get out of bed or you'll be late!" My mom yelled from the bottom of the stairs.
I knew she meant well and I probably owed a lot to her nagging personality, but it was hard to see the positive side of her forcing me back into reality ever morning. My dad, Mark, was nothing like her. Hed been avoiding commitment and responsibility his whole life, which included his daughter and wife. He left us when I was only six. I still saw him every other Christmas or so, but it was never often enough to get to know him. All I knew about Mark was that he was somewhere in Southern Australia, and he was the reason I had these baby blue eyes that everyone loved so much.
I finally reached over to turn off my alarm clock and gradually sat up. I could start to feel the warmth from my dream drift away. I took my shower and put on some plain blue jeans and a light green shirt. I still had about ten minutes left before I needed to be out the door, which meant I could forget about doing my hair. So I put on a little mascara and brushed through my dark brown curls before I grabbed a jacket and ran out the door.
It was the middle of winter and every limb of my body felt it. The chills went through every bone in my body, making it difficult to walk. It never took long to get to school but the cold made it feel drawn out. I turned the corner and there it was, Lakeside High School. A relatively small school, in the middle of our little town. I wasnt really found of school, but it was tolerable.
It was hard to hear anything my teachers said that day; that was fairly normal though. I'd always been a bit of a day dreamer, especially during school, but today it was more than just my dreams that distracted me. That warmth I got from my dreams kept appearing throughout the day, which wasnt normal. It occurred randomly and left as quick as it came. Every time I felt it, I looked frantically around hoping to see him, but I never did. That really wasn't a surprise though. This boy was too perfect to be anything more than my imagination.
When I got home, my mom was still at work and the kitchen was a disaster. I decided to do the dishes and clear the table to help her out. I thought about making dinner too, but it was too early for that anyway. So, instead, I started on my many pages of math homework. As I started on my second page, the warmth ventured back around me, but this time it didn't leave. Everything seemed different. It seemed bright and calm, like everything was just perfect. I was too relaxed to focus anymore, all I could do was enjoy it. I felt like I could sit there forever. It was so peaceful; I really couldnt bring myself to concentrate on anything else.
"Hun, are you home?" There went my mom again, always bringing me back into reality.
"Yeah, Mom. Did you bring dinner?" I asked.
"Yep. I got us a pizza tonight. Sorry I'm late it got crazy at the shop."
I glanced over at my clock. Wow, it was already seven-thirty. I had no idea I had sat there so long, it didnt feel possible. Suddenly I realized how hungry I was and ran downstairs after the smell of pepperoni and cheese pizza.
We were both reasonably quiet during dinner. Normally my mom attacked me with questions about my day, but today she practically swallowed her pizza in one gulp and was gone. She mustve had a longer day then I realized because that wasnt like her at all. After I finished my pizza, I did my math and climbed into bed. As soon as my head hit the pillow I was out, and there he was.
I had always been told I had the prettiest blue eyes but seeing his every night made me sincerely doubt that. His were magical. He always appeared to be curious, as if he was starring at something that confused him terribly and he wanted to know more. His brown hair was darker than mine, and it was crazy, flying in every direction. When I noticed his lips, I practically melted. Although his eyes were his striking feature it was his lips that always got to me. They were so close to mine, and I swore I could actually feel the warmth coming from his breathe. Maybe that was the warmth I had been obsessing about.
Normally this was the extent of my dream, just starring each other down, but tonight it changed. He changed. His normal smile turned into a slight frown. Why was he frowning? I tried to think of something I could have done to make him frown, but nothing came to mind. Then his hand came into vision and the smile reappeared. His hand wasn't dirty or scratched like most guys I had known. It was simply perfect, like everything else about this guy. His hand reached out towards my cheek. Suddenly I felt his hand lightly on my skin and my eyes popped open, but the boy didn't vanish.
I must still be dreaming but I couldnt be. I could see the ceiling of my room and the top of my dresser. Everything was there, unlike in my dreams. My heart was pounding and I felt as if it was about to leap from my chest. I wanted to scream but I was frozen. I couldn't decide if this was a good thing or a bad thing. The guy from my dreams was real which was definitely a good thing, but he was a stranger, in my room, on my bed. I had no idea how he got here or why he was there, which was probably a bad thing. I looked down and discovered that he wasn't even on my bed. He was floating, hovering in the air right above me. Alright, now I knew I was still dreaming.
And then he was gone, out the window before I could saw a word.Reply |
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