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May 08, 2008 @ 09:51:27

#31

queenofhearts

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I don't deserve hugs today I am being a miserable bint

Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter, and those who matter don't mind ~

queenofhearts last visited August 29, 2008

May 08, 2008 @ 09:52:24

#32

delta62

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so.... hugs to make you better

Its been a long road, getting from there to here. Its been a long time, but my time is finally near. And I can feel the change in the wind right now. Nothing's in my way.

May 08, 2008 @ 09:53:43

#33

queenofhearts

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Oh thanks

Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter, and those who matter don't mind ~

May 08, 2008 @ 10:24:31

#34

lostangel91

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wers my hug?

your just jelous because that i can act retarded in public and people still love me!!

lostangel91 last visited August 24, 2008

May 08, 2008 @ 10:37:53

#35

delta62

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here

Its been a long road, getting from there to here. Its been a long time, but my time is finally near. And I can feel the change in the wind right now. Nothing's in my way.

May 08, 2008 @ 20:52:05

#36

lostangel91

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aww thnx hun xxx

your just jelous because that i can act retarded in public and people still love me!!

May 08, 2008 @ 21:53:53

#37

kidplaya

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16/M/Cincinnati, Ohio
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lol i thank u all for ur feedback on my poem and i like most of the stuff being said. i might put more on in the futur so if u want to read it look for it in the newly posted forums wen i put it on.

to all who posted and will post

May 08, 2008 @ 23:42:23

#38

snurky

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20/F/Halifax, Canada
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Well it's cute... but not very original after all love has been compared to mazes for ages...

I like getting freestuff and I'm on my way to getting some cool stuff here, and here .

May 09, 2008 @ 00:11:58

#39

kidplaya

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16/M/Cincinnati, Ohio
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it has?????? i didnt know that

May 09, 2008 @ 02:14:48

#40

charger

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kidplaya said:
i wrote this poem myself. i want to know wat u all think. it is titled Love.

Love is like a maze,
that is meant for two.
Love is like a maze,
that few get through.
Love will come,
Love will go,
Love will be around,
when you don't know.
Love is something,
I will get through.
Because I am one,
amd you are my two.

good again!

i would change, actually take out the "when you dont know" line and
reword the ending...

May 09, 2008 @ 11:46:40

#41

lostangel91

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snurky said:
Well it's cute... but not very original after all love has been compared to mazes for ages...

i havnt heard it being compared to a maze and i think the poems amazing

your just jelous because that i can act retarded in public and people still love me!!

May 09, 2008 @ 21:03:09

#42

kidplaya

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ty lostangel and ty all for ur oppinions on my poem to everyone

May 11, 2008 @ 07:31:16

#43

uchihababe

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15/F/San Antonio, Texas
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really good poem makes sense

Girl who can kick ur ass

May 11, 2008 @ 13:16:14

#44

kidplaya

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again i say ty to everyone who gave me feedback on my poem. if u all want to i have 2 other ones in the forums and i am putting a new one on here today. enjoy yourself and leave feedback if u feel like it.

to all who posted or will post

May 11, 2008 @ 13:35:03

#45

britneylulu

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Our great grandmother worked for a publisher where she read manuscripts. She edited your poem.

Love, a maze,
Meant for two.
Love, a maze,
Few get through.
Love come,
Love go,
Love around,
When we don't know.
Love a thing,
We will get through.
Because I am one,
And you my two.

When she edits, she always removes words like am, is, are. Probably she knows why Bill Clinton had so much trouble with the meaning of is.

Britney and Lulu
Ditzy's Ponies revised 8/19/08

britneylulu last visited September 07, 2008

Edited: May 11, 2008 @ 13:38

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