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Nov 07, 2009 @ 03:47:19

readsalot

Heart of a poet.

TFS Monkey
48583 points

54/F/Somewhere on Earth,
Join Date: Oct 2008

I can't understand,
how this anger overtook,
something that could work,
if patience would guide the way.
to realize the lost good.

Help me to believe,
things will never change again.
We could do better,
put the past where it belongs,
locked away where it stays put.

When did this happen,
this pretentious foolish game?
My mouth must stay closed,
or move to forget,
judgment that was never just.

Forgive me for slamming the door,
this is wrong, there need be no more.

sjo/jazz

The Tanka is usually one verse which has 5,7,5,7,7 syllables per line.
I've joined three Tankas and finished with a couplet.
It appears to be easy, but in counting syllables you diminish the words which you can use. I find it a challenge which gives me a little insight into myself and forces me to keep a poem tight and not meander all over.

Piece of trivia, the yellow rose stands for friendship.

Nothing's easier than believing we understand experiences we have never had.-Gwen Bristow
Holding onto the past, keeps you there.

Nov 07, 2009 @ 03:57:04

Allyson

Ogler
24322 points

23/F/, Michigan
Join Date: Oct 2008

nice poem

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Nov 07, 2009 @ 04:51:37

loveis

The cat's meow

Points Whore Master+
69151 points

100/F/In the mirror,
Join Date: Jun 2007

Very well done! And not easy at all, when you have to play by rules.. - but they are fun!

Nov 07, 2009 @ 05:16:06

backseatcynic

Minister
11244 points

31/M/Henryetta, Oklahoma
Join Date: Aug 2008

readsalot said:

...in counting syllables you diminish the words which you can use. I find it a challenge which gives me a little insight into myself and forces me to keep a poem tight and not meander all over.

I can see that. But the only rules I go by are the ones I make for myself. Just because it's not a "According to Hoyle" poem doesn't make it wrong. I know you know that, but you also know there's academics that don't, or have forgotten. To me they've lost heart and soul to think that way. Rant over.

Nov 07, 2009 @ 05:18:16

readsalot

Heart of a poet.

TFS Monkey
48583 points

54/F/Somewhere on Earth,
Join Date: Oct 2008

backseatcynic said:

I can see that. But the only rules I go by are the ones I make for myself. Just because it's not a "According to Hoyle" poem doesn't make it wrong. I know you know that, but you also know there's academics that don't, or have forgotten. To me they've lost heart and soul to think that way. Rant over.

They're good practice for me, I can be a bit too loquacious. They're more about getting a happy medium in my work. I'm not good with rules.

Nothing's easier than believing we understand experiences we have never had.-Gwen Bristow
Holding onto the past, keeps you there.

Edited: November 07, 2009 @ 05:22

Nov 07, 2009 @ 06:01:01

loveis

The cat's meow

Points Whore Master+
69151 points

100/F/In the mirror,
Join Date: Jun 2007

readsalot said:

They're good practice for me, I can be a bit too loquacious. They're more about getting a happy medium in my work. I'm not good with rules.

Me either; but as I said, they are fun. And I really believe they strengthen your thinking; at least for me, what comes 'natural', comes even easier after having a go or two at those tanka's.

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